Extended Definition: What Is Pop Art?

Extended Definition Rough Outline

First Draft Peer review from Sieun

• Sandy! You did a good job J! I think your topic is enough to be attractive to make your audiences keep attention. Your writing has a good flow, and the choice of vocabularies in each sentence are decent. Your approach to Pop Art can be interesting and persuasive. Also, it is great that, according to the history of Pop Art in specific era, you try to make your own assertion. The intro is perfectly clear. Exactly, you mentioned the direction of your writing.

• However, even though you did not want your audiences to comprehend it in that way, it might have a possibility to look like the explanation of history of Pop Art more than look like the extended definition. Although you explain well what the history of Pop Art is and what really Pop art is, it looks like you explain just about the knowledge of Pop art that you have. I think you’d better figure out what the misconceptions people have about it, and need to make sure that how your extended definition about Pop Art is driven by the misconceptions. Also, need to express what point you want to emphasize on about Pop Art by defining Pop Art in your way.

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